MIT:
Qualities of true friends
What qualities do you seek in your true friends, those who will support
you in your thoughts, words, and deeds? Why have you sought these people
as companions? In enduring the maëlstrom of adolescence, one must
discover those values that one seeks in his friends and friendships. This
struggle to define what one desires in one's friends allows one to define
oneself. Through the agony and ecstasy of my youth, I have codified those
beliefs I seek in my true friends: compassion, humility, and curiosity.
As I have sought these qualities in others, I have begun demanding them
from myself, pushing myself to accept the challenge of becoming a respectable
citizen. Thus, I look to my friends as sculptors, chiseling my personality
into a greater form.
Compassion includes not only the ability to accept others' faults and
shortcomings, but also the courage to suggest solutions after examining
the solution from all perspectives. I look for patient, kindred spirits
who have the willingness to walk a mile in any man's moccasins; they have
full knowledge of another's situation before questioning his judgment.
My companions have shown me time and again those instances where I have
failed in compassion. With their insight and guidance, these uncommon
people have illuminated my own path toward self-betterment.
The honesty to admit defeat and accept victory necessarily carries a
degree of humility with it. After beholding my own uneasiness in accomplishing
these tasks, I peered into the pool of reflection and found that I failed
to remain humble. Though I realized that he "who exalts himself shall
be humbled, and he who humbles himself shall be exalted," I could not
discover the courage to withhold my natural selfish tendencies. However,
after studying the reactions of some venerable peers and friends, I saw
that this quest for humility entails significant effort. Therefore, with
the help of trusted supporters, I devoted my energies to the goal of accepting
victory with the same humility with which I swallow defeat.
From my experience, I have observed that intellectual curiosity flows
best through groups of people. When intellectuals gather to discuss controversial
topics and seek definitions for obscure phenomena, they inherently gain
from hearing other theories. In my short lifetime, I have discovered that
my questioning of the world and my discussions with others have brought
me more knowledge than classroom experiences. Though reading positively
has no substitute, conversations with others certainly help to reinforce
classroom topics. Thus, as I have matured into young-adulthood, I have
searched for those people who might spark my intellectual curiosity simply
because of their words.
The company one keeps molds one's personality. As I view the positive
deeds of others, I instinctually accept some of their behaviors in my
quest to move upward. The closest knit of my high school friendships have
taught me the importance of treasured values and have created some rock-solid
beliefs of my own. My friends have sometimes served as my greatest role
models, forcing me to congratulate myself on discovering character-building
individuals to expedite my growth.
Comments: This essay succeeds in answering the first
part of the question, but it may tarry too long on impressive vocabulary.
Less concern about the word choice and more time bolstering the supporting
examples for seeking compassion, humility, and curiosity in one's friends
would solidify this essay. The author also could more clearly express
why he has sought these qualities in his friends; simply changing "I look
to my friends as sculptors" to "I chose my friends to be my sculptors"
would help.